Task 4

SHORT NOTICE

A proposal has been made by the Minister of Education that the school year begin in the middle of August, instead of at the beginning of September, and that there be a two-week break between semesters. I think that it's a bad idea. I will present my opinion in the following article.

First of all, the two-week break between semesters may distract the students from the learning mood, which is very important, esspecially in the middle of the year. It may cause students to be dissappointed when they come back from this "break(phr.-what do you mean?)".

Secondly, The summer vacation is VERY important for stundents to clean(ww.-clear) their minds and come back to school fresh and happy. Shortening the summer vacation may angry the students, and this angry(ww.) may also get them out of the learning mood. They will deal (with) this issue instead of dealing (with) their final exams.

In conclusion, the Minister of Education can't make such a drastic move without expecting the students to object. I suggest the Minister of Education to reconsider their(ww.) proposal and also to consider the students as a part of the equation.
Your opening and conclusion are good, but your arguments need some work, especially your first argument in paragraph 2. Please go over this paragraph again and rephrase it.
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Task 3

SUCCESS

If you want to be the best on(ww.) your job or in school - you must be a successful person(phr.). In order to be successful you must have some characteristics. In this text I will express my tips and advices(מיותר) for(ww.-on) "how to be successful" question(ww.).


First of all, you must be charismatic. It means that you must have the abillity to talk, convince and atract your audience.For example, if you are debating with someone - you must be able to convince the viewers and even the person you debate with. In addition, you also must have rhetorically speaking(phr.), in order to be able to express yourself well.

It also helps to show that you are well educated, so people will take your words seriously.
Furthermore, you must be very friendly, so people will feel comfortable with your presence, and because you will need your friends' help in(מיותר) one day, so its good to gain many friends on your way to the top.


I mentioned only a small amount(ww.) of characteristics, but there are many more characteristics you should have. There is no doubt that being successful is an excellent goal, but don't forget your friends on your way to(מיותר) there.

Good.
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Daphna