Task 4

SHORT NOTICE

A proposal has been made by the Minister of Education that the school year begin in the middle of August, instead of at the beginning of September, and that there be a two-week break between semesters. I think that it's a bad idea. I will present my opinion in the following article.

First of all, the two-week break between semesters may distract the students from the learning mood, which is very important, esspecially in the middle of the year. It may cause students to be dissappointed when they come back from this "break(phr.-what do you mean?)".

Secondly, The summer vacation is VERY important for stundents to clean(ww.-clear) their minds and come back to school fresh and happy. Shortening the summer vacation may angry the students, and this angry(ww.) may also get them out of the learning mood. They will deal (with) this issue instead of dealing (with) their final exams.

In conclusion, the Minister of Education can't make such a drastic move without expecting the students to object. I suggest the Minister of Education to reconsider their(ww.) proposal and also to consider the students as a part of the equation.
Your opening and conclusion are good, but your arguments need some work, especially your first argument in paragraph 2. Please go over this paragraph again and rephrase it.
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Daphna